"Whales" from a Current Traditional Perspective

From a Current Traditional perspective, there were many things right with the whaling paper: words were spelled right and there weren't many grammar, punctuation or mechanics issues. That being said, I would still critique the paper in several ways. First of all, there are no paragraphs. I found at least four places where new paragraphs could have began. Secondly, the word "you" should be avoided in this type of writing, which I assume to be expository. Also, about two-thirds of the way down the first page, "Indian Tribe" is written; I believe that "Tribe" shouldn't be capitalized. Citation is another issue. Periods should go after the parentheses of in-text citations, and a works cited page should be included. In some areas, parenthetical in-text citations follow sentences that have not quotation marks around or within them; those marks should be included for specificity. It seemed that the paper as a whole was coherent in that it simply placed information before the readers so they could make decisions for themselves about the issue.